For English we had to write your own creative writing story so this is my story i hope you like it. Story circle at the bottom
The Little Fox
Once there was a little fox. The little fox said “I’m hungry Father, may I go get some food from the
nearby woods?” The Father replied “of course my son but be careful because it's dangerous.” The little
fox nodded his head and smiled, “don’t worry Father I will be home by noon.”
nearby woods?” The Father replied “of course my son but be careful because it's dangerous.” The little
fox nodded his head and smiled, “don’t worry Father I will be home by noon.”
The little fox ran out of the burrow into the nearby woods to search for something to eat. In the woods
he spotted a mouse. “Hello” said the little fox, but the mouse only squeaked and ran away. The little fox
continued to search the woods. He soon found a bird. “Hello” said the fox, but the bird only flew away.
The little fox returned home by noon as promised.
he spotted a mouse. “Hello” said the little fox, but the mouse only squeaked and ran away. The little fox
continued to search the woods. He soon found a bird. “Hello” said the fox, but the bird only flew away.
The little fox returned home by noon as promised.
“Father, why don't the other animals like me?”, said the little fox. “Oh son, our kind has hunted their kind
for many years”, “but Father I don’t want to hurt them I only want to be friends,'' replied the little fox.
“Yes I know son, but things like this take time.” “Yes Father.” “Let’s go to bed,” said the Father fox.
for many years”, “but Father I don’t want to hurt them I only want to be friends,'' replied the little fox.
“Yes I know son, but things like this take time.” “Yes Father.” “Let’s go to bed,” said the Father fox.
The next morning the little fox said “Father may I go out to the nearby woods?” “Yes, but be home early,
I am making my famous apple pie.” “I will Father, thank you,” and the little fox ran out the burrow.
I am making my famous apple pie.” “I will Father, thank you,” and the little fox ran out the burrow.
The little fox saw a grey mouse. “Help, help, somebody help me” yelled the grey mouse. The little fox
ran to the pond. “Please can anyone help, a poor mouse is being attacked by a cat.” A bird said “Sure,
as if I would believe you - you’re a fox.” “No please help, she could be hurt'' said the little fox but the bird
only flew away. The little fox ran to the mouse and yelled “put her down.” ” No get your own food” hissed
the cat. The little fox ran at the mean cat and pushed it up to the edge of the cliff. The little fox picked up
the mouse, “thank you” said the mouse. “Mr Cat, please don't be mean to others,'' said the little fox.
“Fine I'll try,” said the cat . As he slipped and fell over the edge of the cliff “Nooo!” said the cat. The fox
caught him just in time and pulled him up.
ran to the pond. “Please can anyone help, a poor mouse is being attacked by a cat.” A bird said “Sure,
as if I would believe you - you’re a fox.” “No please help, she could be hurt'' said the little fox but the bird
only flew away. The little fox ran to the mouse and yelled “put her down.” ” No get your own food” hissed
the cat. The little fox ran at the mean cat and pushed it up to the edge of the cliff. The little fox picked up
the mouse, “thank you” said the mouse. “Mr Cat, please don't be mean to others,'' said the little fox.
“Fine I'll try,” said the cat . As he slipped and fell over the edge of the cliff “Nooo!” said the cat. The fox
caught him just in time and pulled him up.
“Are you ok Mr Cat,” asked the little fox. “I am now, thank you,'' replied the cat. “Would you like to come
to my house?” the little fox said. “My Father is making apple pie.” “I’d love to” said the mouse,” ''why
not?” said the cat.
to my house?” the little fox said. “My Father is making apple pie.” “I’d love to” said the mouse,” ''why
not?” said the cat.
“Father, I'm home! I sure hope you made a lot of apple pie.” “Why is that son?” “Because we have
guests,'' said the little fox. But at that moment he heard a sound at the entrance of the burrow. “I heard
you saved a mouse,'' said the bird. “I’m sorry I didn’t believe you little fox.” “It’s okay, do you want to
come in for some apple pie?” The little bird nodded her head as she came inside, and then they all ate
apple pie together as new friends.
guests,'' said the little fox. But at that moment he heard a sound at the entrance of the burrow. “I heard
you saved a mouse,'' said the bird. “I’m sorry I didn’t believe you little fox.” “It’s okay, do you want to
come in for some apple pie?” The little bird nodded her head as she came inside, and then they all ate
apple pie together as new friends.
The end.
by me
This is my story circle for my story hope you like it :)
Kia ora Paige, well done! I like your use of dialogue in the story. Each time a new speaker starts talking, start on a new line. :) It's great that you went for the story circle as a bit of a challenge. And the graphic you created is very high quality! To improve, can you add in a bit of description to your story, of your characters, as well as the setting? Try to us 'show, don't tell' to engage the reader's 5 senses and draw them in to your story. Thanks Paige -- keep up the great work. :)
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